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Wolves on the Underground by ~Indigo14:iconIndigo14:



There are wolves on the London Underground
with twist of tracks and twist of tails
There are wolves on the London Underground
with silver eyes and silver rails

The roar of trains, the snap of jaws
electric light and padding paws
Where darkness hides the wolves come out
with fur and fear they creep about

Empty station, dusted cowl
the kingdom where the pack now prowl
Bright-dark streaks of painted air
with teeth and blood and bone and hair

Stuck between the concrete trees
dank pine air and ice-less freeze
Caught between the wild and man
and so we’re back where we began

Metal tubes that ring with prey
same times and places every day
The wolves that watch the bullets by
and un-oiled doors that scream and cry

There are wolves on the London Underground
Caught between the wild and man
There are wolves on the London Underground
that take us back where we began.
©2006-2009 ~Indigo14
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Submitted: August 4, 2006
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Wrote this in NAGTY.
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Ooh, cool. I like how the rythm sounds like a train. And the contrast between the natural world and the manmade world works well.

Heh, look at me trying to be all poetry criticy. XD Anyway, I like it, you're good.
*reads a couple times just for the joy of reading it* wow. the pace on this is intense, exactly where i think you want it to be. This feels like a metal or punk song, frankly, a very very good metal or punk song. Your use of small amounts of alliteration through the piece draws the lines out and is one way you keep the pace fast and flowing. "There are wolves on the London Underground/ that take us back where we began. " Is a work of genius, and that's not just an idle compliment. It's got the kinda image meaning, the wolves recalling a kinda primal state or animal state, as well as pointing out that the line is the same one you started with, creating a self-concious cycle in the poem. I /love/ that. "locked-up freeze" confuses me a little bit, only thing I've got that's not 'wow' comment. XD
Wow, thanks very much. That was a brilliant comment. :D
Love it. I've told you before. Great poem. :D
You're welcome! It's a poem worth taking the time to comment on. and thanks for the comment praise.
I made some visuals of it which can be found here. I think you'll find I've credited you quite enough :P

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Great poem! Ha, I can still remember the exact time when that was written. Most of the course is just a blur now...

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And be all the better for its wonder within me,
A pulsing remorse, a
Dirge, ever sweetened, ever
Gushing from my breath.

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